Aaron Butler: This is an interesting and unique topic. I'm interested in learning what kind of people he will interview for his story. There are a lot of examples he uses about the different types of things students will wear. He could even be more specific as he puts more into his story.
Cory Patel: This topic applies to a lot of students that attend Eastview. He could work on using more of the 5 W's in his leader paragraph, such as who makes decisions for dances, when dances are, etc.,
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