What if all of your friends, family, everyone you knew looked exactly the same? Think of how boring it would be to look at people! That's why I'm encouraging you to find your own style and wear it without any fear of judgement. Too many people at Eastview have the same hairstyle, same clothing style, same style in general. It's time to change things up a little bit.
What a lot of people don't seem to know is that there are a lot of other stores to shop at besides Abercrombie & Fitch and Hollister. Next time you're at the mall, check out some other stores that you've never been to before. You might find something you really like even if it's completely different. It's okay if no one at school has anything like it. It's actually a good thing to be an individual. Just be bold and stand out!
Buying clothes from different stores can be more cost-friendly, sometimes. It depends what your style is.
Thursday, May 28, 2009
Prewrite
1. What is a problem/issue that our entire student body (our school, community, country, etc.) faces today?
too many students at Eastview High School are not being able to express themselves in their day to day dress because many are afraid of the judgement they will get from their peers or groups of friends. So many conform to just wearing the similar things.
2. What is your view/position on the problem or situation?
people should not be afraid to "branch" out or try different and BOLD things that they like. It will be easier for them to express themselves and they wont feel like they have to conform to the looks or fashions of others.
3. What would you like to achieve with your editorial? (What is the desired result?)To persuade people that it is really okay to be bold and go all out. To find that they will feel a bit more at ease with themselves and everyone else.
4. How will you persuade your audience to adopt your viewpoint as theirs? List at least 4 persuasive points.
Suggest fashion magazines.
Express the point that fashion is not just a feminine thing but guys can really get into it too. (breaking the sterotypical idea)
It will be less expensive. Adopting ones own style is cheaper because your money is being spent on more than one thing. or you get more for your money.
shop at places like vintage markets or downtown boutiques, things that attract their eye but would never really wear.
5. How will you motivate your readership to action in your conclusion?
we could tell people about what we are wearing and where we bought it from.
6. How will your editorial serve a public purpose?
it will persuade people to not care about the general publics ideas or opinions
too many students at Eastview High School are not being able to express themselves in their day to day dress because many are afraid of the judgement they will get from their peers or groups of friends. So many conform to just wearing the similar things.
2. What is your view/position on the problem or situation?
people should not be afraid to "branch" out or try different and BOLD things that they like. It will be easier for them to express themselves and they wont feel like they have to conform to the looks or fashions of others.
3. What would you like to achieve with your editorial? (What is the desired result?)To persuade people that it is really okay to be bold and go all out. To find that they will feel a bit more at ease with themselves and everyone else.
4. How will you persuade your audience to adopt your viewpoint as theirs? List at least 4 persuasive points.
Suggest fashion magazines.
Express the point that fashion is not just a feminine thing but guys can really get into it too. (breaking the sterotypical idea)
It will be less expensive. Adopting ones own style is cheaper because your money is being spent on more than one thing. or you get more for your money.
shop at places like vintage markets or downtown boutiques, things that attract their eye but would never really wear.
5. How will you motivate your readership to action in your conclusion?
we could tell people about what we are wearing and where we bought it from.
6. How will your editorial serve a public purpose?
it will persuade people to not care about the general publics ideas or opinions
Tuesday, May 26, 2009
Feature Story Peer Edits
Emmy Burns - Twilight
1. What are some areas that could use more detail? Why?
I...don't really know, your article was super detailed about everything, very descriptive, and answers just about any question there is about the series.
2. What additional sources might the author use? Does the lead involve you in the story?
Almost all of your sources seemed to like the series a lot. It could be more interesting if you used a few more sources that didn't like the series and why they didn't. I really liked your lead. Since I don't know a lot about the Twilight series, it made me very interested in learning what it was about and why so many people like it.
3. Does the story contain a well defined scene (a detailed description of someone doing something or something happening)? What is it? If not, make a suggestion for a scene that might work.
A scene? Hmm...I'm not sure where a scene would be needed...maybe in the paragraph where you're talking about the poor special effects, you can give an example from the movie.
4. What would you like to see or hear more of? Less of? Include, any other suggestions you have for improvement.
Maybe you could describe what each of the books are about a little bit more. Otherwise, I think this article was very well-written.
Aaron Butler - Mayan Theory
1. What are some areas that could use more detail? Why?
You could talk about why the Mayan's think the world will end on this day, what's their reasoning?
2. What additional sources might the author use? Does the lead involve you in the story?
Maybe a teacher or someone who has studied this theory before.
3. Does the story contain a well defined scene (a detailed description of someone doing something or something happening)? What is it? If not, make a suggestion for a scene that might work.
Not really, I don't know how you could include a scene in this type of article since the Mayan civilization was a long time ago.
4. What would you like to see or hear more of? Less of? Include, any other suggestions you have for improvement.
More information on the civilization, what other predictions they had that came true, etc. Otherwise, good job! This was an interesting topic.
1. What are some areas that could use more detail? Why?
I...don't really know, your article was super detailed about everything, very descriptive, and answers just about any question there is about the series.
2. What additional sources might the author use? Does the lead involve you in the story?
Almost all of your sources seemed to like the series a lot. It could be more interesting if you used a few more sources that didn't like the series and why they didn't. I really liked your lead. Since I don't know a lot about the Twilight series, it made me very interested in learning what it was about and why so many people like it.
3. Does the story contain a well defined scene (a detailed description of someone doing something or something happening)? What is it? If not, make a suggestion for a scene that might work.
A scene? Hmm...I'm not sure where a scene would be needed...maybe in the paragraph where you're talking about the poor special effects, you can give an example from the movie.
4. What would you like to see or hear more of? Less of? Include, any other suggestions you have for improvement.
Maybe you could describe what each of the books are about a little bit more. Otherwise, I think this article was very well-written.
Aaron Butler - Mayan Theory
1. What are some areas that could use more detail? Why?
You could talk about why the Mayan's think the world will end on this day, what's their reasoning?
2. What additional sources might the author use? Does the lead involve you in the story?
Maybe a teacher or someone who has studied this theory before.
3. Does the story contain a well defined scene (a detailed description of someone doing something or something happening)? What is it? If not, make a suggestion for a scene that might work.
Not really, I don't know how you could include a scene in this type of article since the Mayan civilization was a long time ago.
4. What would you like to see or hear more of? Less of? Include, any other suggestions you have for improvement.
More information on the civilization, what other predictions they had that came true, etc. Otherwise, good job! This was an interesting topic.
Thursday, May 21, 2009
Feature Story
As the weather gradually starts to get hotter and hotter everyday, students at Eastview feel the school year coming to an end and look forward to their beginning of summer break. Students reflect on the 2008-09 school year; classes, teacher, co-curriculars, friends, and also make plans for their summer break.
For some students, this year went by smoothly. "It seems like we just started school a few weeks ago, and now it's already ending," says Reed Larsen, a sophomore at Eastview. "I was in tech crew all year, so that kept me busy and made the time fly." For other students, not so much. "I'm so ready for the year to be over!" exclaims Maddy Settle, junior. "I've been so stressed out all year, and I can't wait for summer vacation."
It's safe to say that all students are excited for the three blissful months of summer vacation, such as Therese Harrah, junior. "I've been counting down the days of school left until summer break since February." Therese informed me that we currently only have 13 days of school left!
Many have different plans to celebrate the 4th of July. "I'll probably be going to my aunt's house for a barbeque and to watch fireworks," says Reed. "It's always fun to catch up with family and eat berries."
Some students plan to go out of town this summer. "I'll be staying in Chicago for most of June to study art. I'm super duper excited! I've always wanted to go to Chicago," says Therese who is very interested in art.
Summer is a great time to attend concerts! Since the alternative punk band Blink-182 recently got back together, they are starting their first tour in a long time this summer. "I'm so there!" screams Joey Gustafson, one of Blink-182's 'greatest fans'. "I'll probably go to Warped tour this summer! I went there last year and had a great time." says Maddy.
Although it seems so far away, after summer, a new school year will start. "I think it's weird thet we're going to be seniors next year. I still don't feel grown up." Therese says. Not many people are thinking too much of the next school year, at least not until summer is done.
For some students, this year went by smoothly. "It seems like we just started school a few weeks ago, and now it's already ending," says Reed Larsen, a sophomore at Eastview. "I was in tech crew all year, so that kept me busy and made the time fly." For other students, not so much. "I'm so ready for the year to be over!" exclaims Maddy Settle, junior. "I've been so stressed out all year, and I can't wait for summer vacation."
It's safe to say that all students are excited for the three blissful months of summer vacation, such as Therese Harrah, junior. "I've been counting down the days of school left until summer break since February." Therese informed me that we currently only have 13 days of school left!
Many have different plans to celebrate the 4th of July. "I'll probably be going to my aunt's house for a barbeque and to watch fireworks," says Reed. "It's always fun to catch up with family and eat berries."
Some students plan to go out of town this summer. "I'll be staying in Chicago for most of June to study art. I'm super duper excited! I've always wanted to go to Chicago," says Therese who is very interested in art.
Summer is a great time to attend concerts! Since the alternative punk band Blink-182 recently got back together, they are starting their first tour in a long time this summer. "I'm so there!" screams Joey Gustafson, one of Blink-182's 'greatest fans'. "I'll probably go to Warped tour this summer! I went there last year and had a great time." says Maddy.
Although it seems so far away, after summer, a new school year will start. "I think it's weird thet we're going to be seniors next year. I still don't feel grown up." Therese says. Not many people are thinking too much of the next school year, at least not until summer is done.
Wednesday, May 20, 2009
Theme Statement - Feature Story
1. Theme Statement: The 2008-09 school year will soon be coming to an end. Students reflect on the year and make plans for summer break.
Sources:
1. Reed Larsen
2. Therese Harrah
3. Joey Gustafson
4. Ronnie Allen
5. Sami Driscoll
Questions:
1. What was your favorite memory of this school year?
2. What are your plans for summer?
3. What was your favorite class from this year?
4. What do you like most about summer?
5. What are you most looking forward to next year?
Sources:
1. Reed Larsen
2. Therese Harrah
3. Joey Gustafson
4. Ronnie Allen
5. Sami Driscoll
Questions:
1. What was your favorite memory of this school year?
2. What are your plans for summer?
3. What was your favorite class from this year?
4. What do you like most about summer?
5. What are you most looking forward to next year?
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